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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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The majority of the
people
 strongly believe that
intelligence
 is the only parameter to measure that
success
. while others consider both of them unrelated. In my opinion, there are many ways to measure
success
 along with
intelligence
.
This
 essay will explain both parameters on
this
 matter including my own analysis. On the one hand, the reason majority considers intelligent
people
 successful is because of the famous examples we have in our lives, which makes us believe in the positive relationship between intellect and
success
.
Such
 as some of them successfully known personalities like Steve Jobs and Bill gates, as they graduated from the world's best institutions and now are known as successful figures.
Therefore
, human beings started correlating
success
 with
intelligence
.
On the other hand
, It is always not necessary to be intelligent to achieve something, some
people
, in spite of being the best in their academics fail in their practical lives.
For example
, a person hired for the Research Analyst position in a company, based on having good grades in school but fails to perform his job, as he lacks the practical skills.
Thus
, we can say being intelligent can not guarantee you a successful career. In conclusion, I reaffirm my statement that measuring
success
 has many factors and
intelligence
 is only one element as the misconception is common on
this
 matter but we
also
 have many examples of non-brilliant students having more achievements than other smart
people
 around them.
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