It is often thought that the increase in juveniles crime can be attributed to violence to the society. Do you agree that this is the main cause of the crime? What solution can you offer to deal with this situation.

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According to some
people
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the increase in the rate of crimes committed by teenagers is due to exposure showcased in
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shows and
movies
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. While I agree with the view that
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the brutality
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depicted in media can contribute to
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problem, there are several measures that can be taken to deal with juvenile
crime
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.
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, I think the reason some
minors
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commit
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a crime
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crime
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crimes
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is that they are heavily influenced by the violence shown in films or
Tv
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series and do not understand the consequences.
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, they believe that
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makes them
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superior to their counterparts,
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, they do not understand the legality of committing
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an offense
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offense
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offence
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.
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, my son’s
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who was involved in a heated argument with his friend brought out a small knife from his pocket and injured his friend when ask why he said it was an act of
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that he watched it in a movie a month ago.
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watching
violent
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a violent
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film
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films
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on
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would make
minors
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to be violent .
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, there are effective solutions to address the growing problems of child
crime
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,
movies
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that are been shown on
tv
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or
media
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in media
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should be censored.
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this
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government should help reduce the
amount
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of
violence
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movies
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that television, radio, and internet shows.
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addition
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parents should
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help to block channels that show these
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by using
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the parental
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guidance code that comes with every decoder at home .
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American psychologist in 2001 revealed that most channels that showed
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ferocity
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movies
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of movies
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was
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were
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censored by the American censor committee. Evidently,
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will help curb the
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that are been watched by
minors
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.
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, it is essential for parents to monitor their
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children's
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activities by knowing the kind of pursuit children indulge in and
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give them constant support and guidance. In conclusion,
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apply
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restricting
minors
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to the type of
movies
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they watch and
neccessry
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necessary
support from their parents can reduce the incidence of juvenile
crime
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • juvenile crime
  • desensitize
  • social and economic factors
  • peer pressure
  • parental neglect
  • predisposition
  • psychological issues
  • mental health support
  • educational programs
  • community programs
  • mentorship
  • sense of purpose
  • media exposure
  • non-violent conflict resolution
  • positive activities
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