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Museums and art galleries should focus on works that show the history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is being suggested by many
people
 that
museums
 and
art
galleries
 are
essential
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element
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 to
display
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displaying
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 local historical and cultural
works
 and they should promote these
instead
 of
internationals
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international
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 ones. I strongly agree with
this
 notion because it can give an insight to
new
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the new
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 generation about many historical facts and
also
 a sense of patriotism.
To begin
 with, a large number of
people
 are in favour of displaying
country's
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a country's
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 own historical and cultural
works
 because it can increase the knowledge of
background
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the background
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 history of the
country
. To explain, after the new
ear
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era
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 of globalization,
new
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a new
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 generation may be oblivious about their own
country
.
Hence
,
this
 approach can help them to grab interesting facts from the
work
 displayed in these
museums
 and
art
galleries
. In
addtion
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addition
,
such
phenomenon
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 can bring a feeling of
petriotism
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patriotism
 among
the
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people
 of all age groups. If
people
 get a chance to observe the things of
heros
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heroes
 and fighters of
the
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history, they may feel a sense of love and pride for their own
country
. A survey conducted by Oxford University, in March
,
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 2016 clearly unveiled that when
museums
 and
art
galleries
 started showing
country's
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the country's
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 own culture and
historcial
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historical
work
, a number
people
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of people
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 accepted that they felt proud and grabbed interesting knowledge about many facts about these.
However
, it is undeniable fact that promotion of international
work
 may ramp up the
multiculturelism
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multiculturalism
 in the society which may be a reason
of
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 social
hormony
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harmony
. If
people
 see the historical and cultural
works
 along with their own
country
's
works
, there may
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a chances
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chances
a chance
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 of respect for other cultures and
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artwork
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art
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artwork
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work
 in them. Ultimately,
this
 may break the social barriers in
the
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society and can promote the virtues.
For example
, brotherhood and fraternity. To conclude, it is unequivocal that
work
 of local history and culture should be promoted by
museums
 and
galleries
 than international ones. I
adoocate
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advocate
 the fact as it can assist
people
 to know more about their
country
 and they may feel a feeling of respect and love in them.
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