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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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Considering to live in other land has been a trend as it enables increasing the quality of life,
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, if we choose to move from developing country to a growing country.
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, moving
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 a new place where you must speak a non-mother
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 can influence serious social issues and practical problems. In my perspective, you can overcome these issues
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through great
 preparation before moving away. On the one hand, being an outlander is not an easy job if you do not have excellent secondary
language
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skills
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. The
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 problem
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 is that it will lead to
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 social issue for
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 who needs to socialize and connect to others. Thence, it will be stressful if we have to survive in an alien land without having a shoulder to lean on.
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, in some countries, the bullying case usually happens in
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 where one of the members could not communicate well.
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, all these problems caused by cultural differences could be maintained when an outlander has already set a good plan before flying away.
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, to prevent a social burden, we have to consider having a host family in a new environment.
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 family might help us to socialize easily.
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,
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 method could be a bridge to make new friends as the native people may introduce new landers to their friends.
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,
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immigrant people will probably advantage an employer. Particularly, some jobs,
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could be done without any communication
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, but hard
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such
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the designer
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.
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, many designers around the world are gathering in Paris for showing off their
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 in fashion,
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, they do not have great
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skills
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. In conclusion,
language
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 is a basic requirement to survive in
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 new society, even though, you have planned it well before moving away.
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,
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 is still a key point to
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 independent and settled.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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