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some people say that it is possible to tell about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes.Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person #culture #character #choice #clothes
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 of dressing has always played a crucial role in
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lives
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.
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, there is an opinion asserting that
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 can be gained regarding
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their culture and personality from their
way
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 of dressing. From my point of view, it is a practical
way
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 of understanding
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others. Prior to all, every nation around the world has its own
cultures
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culture
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. living in a particular region,
people
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immitate
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 the
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 of dressing in that area. Needless to say that they can be identified easily among
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 of other nations. Take Indian
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 as an example, they wear long
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 clothes called Sari, so by
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 to Europe , they can be identified as Indians easily since europian’s
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 of clothing differs.
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, the character of
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 has always
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 their
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 of clothing.
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 is because
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’s emotion vary based on their personality,
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 psychologists have characterized individuals based on
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behaviour
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 called extraverted and introverted
refering
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referring
 to the tendency one person have to socialize. The more someone is extroverted, the more he/she tries to socialize.
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, while an introverted person
prefer
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 to wear darker clothes,
extroverted
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an extroverted
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 has a tendency to choose
colorful
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 is why a plethora of information can be understood through the
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people
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 dress. To conclude,
people
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 of various countries dress based on their culture, so their culture can be identified easily
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trough
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 the
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 of dressing;
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, based on
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’s character whether they are extroverted or introverted, their chosen
color
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colour
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clothes
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of clothes
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 may vary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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