Some people think it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports is better like tennis and swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some say that it is more beneficial while
playing
Wrong verb form
play
sports
like cricket, football
in teams. While others would argue that it is good to take part in solo Correct word choice
and football
sports
like tennis and swimming. I believe individual sports
brings
Change the verb form
bring
more
better career growth personally to reach Change the word
apply
at
a champion level.
On the one hand, the spirit of playing together Remove the preposition
apply
keep
the Correct subject-verb agreement
keeps
team
co-operation to achieve their desired goals. The need for collaborative thinking makes every individual to
put their effort at the required level through which the Change the verb form
apply
team
relationship and trust can be in made better position to present themselves with
competitors. Change preposition
to
Moreover
, innovative ideas will gain the essence of togetherness in the long lasting
endeavours effectively and Add a hyphen
long-lasting
makes
the Change the verb form
make
team
to
work efficiently. Change the verb form
apply
For instance
, advice given by the team
captain at
Change preposition
in
sports
are
equally respected by Change the verb form
is
team
individuals for enhancing the
better results with positive commitment.
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, every individual possesses a dream that has to be fulfilled with certain growth in their career. The requirement of hard work determines that an individual had
has to perform well in order to gain the accepted level of accomplishment from the audience. Unnecessary verb
apply
As a result
, the devotion of time gives the performer to boost more energy in achieving the status of records for future generations to look Change preposition
at as
as
a model of success. Replace the word
like
For example
, tennis player Stephy Graph became popular among the teenagers
girls in Canada for her thrice accomplishment Replace the word
teenage
of
U.S open tennis from 2010 to 2013.
To conclude, individuals can receive more benefits while playing in teams which Change preposition
in
enhance
Correct subject-verb agreement
enhances
the
Correct article usage
apply
team
cooperation. I believe the essential requirement of each individual is to have a
personal growth in Remove the article
apply
career
for Correct pronoun usage
their career
his career
her career
better
embrace of medals for future generations to think.Add an article
the better
a better
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- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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