Many people believe that every individual is responsible for his/her own healthy lifestyle. Others believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Thanks to medical breakthroughs nowadays, people live longer than in the old days; yet the modern lifestyle may
also
bring many health issues and burden the health system. In
this
essay, individual responsibility and the public healthcare system will both be explored, and they are evenly important to contributing to a healthy society. On one side, everybody should be responsible for their bodies. The long working hours, popular fast food trends and the continuous improving technology on the internet will keep people stay away from regular workouts,
therefore
leading to obesity or imbalanced nutrition,
for instance
, people will meet friends and family for gathering in the old days, but due to video conferencing can be easily accessible to reach others from every corner in the world,
as a result
, the virtual hangouts for chatting or gaming has become a trend. Without sufficient exercise and relying on frozen food or fast meal will hinder the fat burn.
This
personal selection should take part in the unhealthy outcome.
On the other hand
,
although
an individual's choice of a healthier living style can ease the burden on the medical system, some serious illnesses
such
as cancer, or unpredicted disease like COVID-19 is inevitable, which needs the government to raise the subsidy on medical research and experiment, in order to keep citizen away from sick.
For example
, apart from a regular basis on subsidiary policy for researchers, the government should spend more to hire expertise for bigger progress on medical breakthroughs during some unexpected pandemic. In conclusion, under the big coverage from the governing department on medical care, each person should have obligation to stay healthy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventative care
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health policies
  • healthcare accessibility
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • nutritional information
  • government intervention
  • health education programs
  • public health campaigns
  • personal accountability
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