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Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give a reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

As shopping online
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 more and more popular nowadays, the debate on whether purchasing things through
internet
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 is
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a benefit
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benefit
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 or not has been heated. As for as I am concerned, the advantages can overtake the drawbacks.
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 with, online shopping can provide various choices to consumers. As the regional limitation is eliminated once
people
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shopping
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 online, they can actually buy whatever they like throughout the world.
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, citizens do not need to fly to certain countries for buying
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unique items but can select the imported goods on the net.
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, online shopping
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 customers
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to
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 products and choose the best which
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 their lives and
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results
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 in a higher living standard.
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, the products may not be reliable on
internet
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the internet
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. In order to make higher profits, sellers will
eaggerate
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exaggerate
 the pros and hide the cons of
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 commodities.
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, photoshop can be done
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lighlighting
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highlighting
 the advantages owing to attract more
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attention
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attentions
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attention
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 and purchases.
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, as the photos are usually the majority judgement of the products, the pictures shown online
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be
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lack
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authenticity if the disadvantages are not fairly introduced to the consumers. Money can be wasted once
people
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 find out that the items they received are not the same as they
expcted
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expected
.  In conclusion,
although
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people
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 may buy
wrong
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 goods online due to
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fake information, it can be
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 prevented by checking the comments and reputation of the firm.
Moreover
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 shopping online can indeed benefit
people
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 as it
provids
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provides
 more choices and give
people
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changes
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chances
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 to
compared
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compare
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 the items.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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