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The advances in air travel are focused only for the upper class and this seems to have left others with no benefit. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#advances #air #travel #class #benefit
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In the contemporary world, air travelling became common to every
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 equally. While
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 some
people
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 argue that the upper-class passengers take most of the benefit. I do not agree with the given statement
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, I will explain why.
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, it is the given fact that
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 and business class passengers bear the most of the total cost. To elaborate,
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 form of pricing that the group of
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 pay significantly more cost to enjoy premium service has started from air travelling service.
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, it spread to other industries
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 as hotels, streamers on internet broadcasts, and even hospitals.
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, the hotels in Las Vegas can easily be considered as non-affordable prices as they have gorgeous decorations and can see the best circus show in the world on daily basis without extra charge. But it is not expensive at all it is cheaper than many hotels in Seoul or Tokyo. We can observe a common point in the system which calls VIP customers. Those VIPs pay tremendous dollars that do not worth enough for actual service because their wealth is beyond our imagination.
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, some
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 might say they are just bragging and even taking away our advantage ,
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, if remove
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-class seats and replace them with triple numbers of economy class
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 the price for individuals raise to more than double per ticket.
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, economy class seats are reasonable prices as the existence of passengers who are willing to afford
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-class seats. To conclude, if we understand the system of the pricing pyramid, it is obvious that 1% of
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 bear at least 5 times more price than 99% of the
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.
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 just like tax and we should not be offended by VIPs.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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