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Scientist agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many are of the belief that there is a direct relation between our kind of
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 and amount of
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. While the majority of the individuals believe that,
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 problem and its solution is education. There are rational arguments on both sides of
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 topic, which will be discussed in detail, followed by my point of view. Some scientists think that for being healthy we should have a healthy diet in our life and try to have the healthy lifestyle they believe, more vegetables and uses less fat and sugar , as well as fast
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 and generally junky
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 along with a regular exercise, can help us until being more
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. Of course,
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 a mindset is due to more knowledge about all factors which are effective on the body and our
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. It means if ordinary people have enough knowledge about all tips which are effective on their
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 all education should start even at primary school and introduce healthy
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 to children, society growth with a good attitude.
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, some people believe that education and theories training have not efficient and if want to have a healthy society have to do other activities
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 as limiting producers that do not produce unhealthy
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 as well as encouraging them to supply more healthy
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 and use less fat, sugar and all substance which are not beneficial for the body. In conclusion, as far as I know, improving knowledge and training about any topic provides desirable conditions that we Can succeed in that issue. In healthy issue
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 we should have enough training to all of the folk from student to the elderly in care services centre for , example,
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, other useful measures should be taken by the officials.
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