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Some people think adults should give children freedom to make mistakes. Others think adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 are convinced that adults should allow
children
 to make
mistakes
 learning from them, others
people
 disagree with
this
 opinion.
This
 essay will discuss both views and it will explain why I firmly believe that adults should monitor their
children
. On the one hand, there are
people
 who prefer
children
's freedom in order to give them the chance to learn from their
mistakes
. Actually,
this
 is a diffuse educating
way
 but I firmly disagree because there are risks that lead
children
 to do something that can not be undone. To exemplify, if a child is playing a dangerous game, something unpleasant could happen.
On the other hand
, there are
people
 who prefer to prevent
children
 from making
mistakes
. I am of the opinion that
this
 is the best
way
 to educate
children
 because adults should be the guideline for younger and they should teach everything to them, including all the
way
 to avoid making
mistakes
.
In addition
, with
this
 method the percentage to run into dangerous situations decrease. 
For instance
, my parents when I was a child helped me to understand which games and situations I had to avoid. As a consequence, I did not learn from my
mistakes
 but from my parents' advice. To sum up, there are two different points of view concerning the best education
way
 of
children
. There are
people
 who prefer to give
children
 freedom rather than to help them with the purpose of avoiding
mistakes
. I firmly believe that the
second
 opinion is better due to the avoidance of unsafety activities.
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