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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You have just read an article in an inernational travel magazie which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazie. IN your letter - Correct the information in the article - Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention some incorrect information regarding my
city
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, Osku, published in your international travel magazine on September 25th. What was inaccurate about my town was the setting of its outstanding landscapes and historical spots. To be more precise, Soha Lake is located in the north of the
city
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 in Soha village,
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 you mentioned it in
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 wrong location.
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, Kandovan village is nestled in the south of the
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,
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 you placed it in the north of Osku. I believe that it is essential that an international travel magazine provides accurate data concerning diverse spots in the world.
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 is because
this
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 accuracy prevents people from being confused and misled. It
also
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 greatly contributes to the magazine's
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its
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 popularity among people. I would kindly suggest that you edit the previous version of the article and publish it again with a description about the incorrect data, which will not only enhance your followers' trustworthiness but
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 reduce possible challenges that tourists may face. Thank you for your consideration and your time. I look forward to hearing from you. Please feel free to contact me if you need any
further
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 information about my
city
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. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi

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task response
You answered all parts of the task. It is clear what to fix and how to fix it. Keep this in mind when you write.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear order. Start with the wrong fact, then give the correct fact, then say why it matters and what to do next. Use easy link words like first, then, also, finally.
task response
The letter covers the three required parts: correction, why it matters, and what to do.
coherence and cohesion
The tone is polite and shows respect to the editor.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • correct
  • wrong
  • fact
  • article
  • editor
  • readers
  • town
  • place
  • event
  • day
  • month
  • year
  • distance
  • near
  • old
  • new
  • source
  • check
  • verify
  • update
  • online
  • print
  • apology
  • error
  • fix
  • idea
  • suggest
  • respond
  • report
  • future
  • trust
  • help
  • local
  • official
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