In the future, it seems more difficult to live on the Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
think we should invest
money
to
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in research on other planets to live
because
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it is will be hard to live on the
Earth
in the future. In my opinion, I do not agree with
this
statement because of some reasons below. On the one hand, finding a new
planet
to live on is not possible. Until now, only the
Earth
has life in the Solar system because it has several suitable conditions to live in
such
as temperature and atmosphere. There is no evidence that other planets have any signs of life and the universe's environment is very strict to humans with no gravity and high pressure.
Besides
, human technology is not adapted
with
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to/for universe exploration. Because of limited technical development,
people
only have launched some satellites and spaceships to collect some samples and conditions around our
planet
to research the affection from space to the
Earth
.
Additionally
, the farthest distance humans reach is from the
Earth
to the moon because our spaceships
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not enough power to get
further
,
therefore
, to reach a
planet
such
as Mars, with the distance counted by light-years, is impossible.
Instead
of investing
money
to find a new
planet
,
people
should spend it to make positive changes on the
Earth
.
People
should invest
money
to create materials which are friendly
with
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to the environment to replace some toxic materials
such
as plastic, which causes causing marine pollution. Electrical transportation should be used to replace vehicles running on fossil fuel
,
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and is a positive way to reduce emissions.
Besides
that, the
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should be controlled by governments and individuals to decrease the burden on the
Earth
because resources
such
as food and water are limited, especially accommodations. In conclusion, I believe that humans should invest
money
to improve our environment
first
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after that, we can explore the universe to find a new home for our kind, on other planets.
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