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In the future, it seems more difficult to live on the Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 think we should invest
money
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in research on other planets to live
because
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 it is will be hard to live on the
Earth
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 in the future. In my opinion, I do not agree with
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 statement because of some reasons below. On the one hand, finding a new
planet
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 to live on is not possible. Until now, only the
Earth
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 has life in the Solar system because it has several suitable conditions to live in
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 as temperature and atmosphere. There is no evidence that other planets have any signs of life and the universe's environment is very strict to humans with no gravity and high pressure.
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, human technology is not adapted
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to/for universe exploration. Because of limited technical development,
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 only have launched some satellites and spaceships to collect some samples and conditions around our
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 to research the affection from space to the
Earth
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.
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, the farthest distance humans reach is from the
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 to the moon because our spaceships
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 not enough power to get
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,
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, to reach a
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 as Mars, with the distance counted by light-years, is impossible.
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 of investing
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 to find a new
planet
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,
people
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 should spend it to make positive changes on the
Earth
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.
People
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 should invest
money
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 to create materials which are friendly
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to the environment to replace some toxic materials
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 as plastic, which causes causing marine pollution. Electrical transportation should be used to replace vehicles running on fossil fuel
,
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 and is a positive way to reduce emissions.
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 that, the
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 should be controlled by governments and individuals to decrease the burden on the
Earth
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 because resources
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 as food and water are limited, especially accommodations. In conclusion, I believe that humans should invest
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 to improve our environment
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 after that, we can explore the universe to find a new home for our kind, on other planets.
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