Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think this is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Successful
sports
professionals can gain a have high paying salaries than individuals in other vital careers.some people
think this
is fully justified while others people
think it is unfair.accordingly
a couple of reasons will be explored in this
essay.
I am of the opinion that some people
think It is unfair to reason income such
popular and professional sportsman or women’s is high and consequently
is not necessary for sports
individual and can this
deal money
in other sectors society to spend until the sport that is
too much.by way of illustration for building schools,charity,help to cancer centres and other poor people
and low income .It is argued that people
think that even many consistence years of effort and hard-working and saving money
again can not have for example
spacious flat or big house,posh SUV,luxury travel ,have a
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such
leisure amenities and other stuff like this
.
On the other hand
,have number low of
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population
community is composed of celebrities and Correct article usage
the population
sports
professionals maybe one percent
of the total.Experts believe that Change the spelling
per cent
this
individual with have
a Change the verb form
has
money making
job ,famous and popular is few I agree with Add a hyphen
money-making
this
subject that have
a great deal more Change the verb form
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money
.Additionally
, Ali Dae is acceptable
and admirable Correct article usage
an acceptable
sports
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sportsman
man
and I praised him for his prodigious personality because he is highly serious in his work and one of the best personality
in our country Fix the agreement mistake
personalities
and
I am proud of him for having Correct word choice
apply
such
sports
man
.when he was very young had persistent endeavors
in football and gaining named Mr goal in football. Ali Dae is famous Change the spelling
endeavours
home
and abroad and having worthy a great deal and even now has more activities in education young Change preposition
at home
sports
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sportsman
man
and furthermore
is benevolent
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the benevolent
a benevolent
man
.I am take
the view that Change the verb form
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this
is not unfair because is success
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successful
my
our community with high Correct pronoun usage
apply
well paid
job that not famous and Add a hyphen
well-paid
people
not aware about
business and lifestyle.
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