Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think this is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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sports

professionals can gain a have high paying salaries than individuals in other vital careers.some

people

think

this

is fully justified while others

people

think it is unfair.

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this

essay. I am of the opinion that some

people

think It is unfair to reason income

such

popular and professional sportsman or women’s is high and

consequently

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sports

individual and can

this

deal

money

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people

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people

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money

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such

leisure amenities and other stuff like

this

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,have number low

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population

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the population

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community is composed of celebrities and

sports

professionals maybe one

percent

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of the total.Experts believe that

this

individual with

have

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money making

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job ,famous and popular is few I agree with

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a great deal more

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man

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in our country

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endeavors

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in football and gaining named Mr goal in football. Ali Dae is famous

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and abroad and having worthy a great deal and even now has more activities in education young

sports

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man

and

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the view that

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success

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doctors in

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our community with high

well paid

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people

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business and lifestyle. In conclusion, the individual

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internationally recognized if had great income has

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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financial remuneration
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merit
talent
demand
entertainment value
career span
physical demands
justified
unfair
criticism
income inequality
societal priorities
sportsmanship

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