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The gap between the rich and the poor is growing. What problem does this create? What can be done to tackle them?

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In the contemporary era, the
difference
 between rich and poor has been increasing significantly.
This
difference
 has led to various grave issues which need to be tackled at the earliest.
This
 essay will discuss the issues that are being faced because of
this
 disparity and ways to tackle the aforementioned situation. The prime reasons for the gap between the poor and rich are: lack of
education
 and corrupted governing authorities.
Firstly
, due to the increase in private schools
education
 has become costlier and it is not feasible for poor people to provide
education
 to their students. A few years back, the
government
 used to invest in
government
 schools and there were many options available;
however
, nowadays corrupted parties do not bother to invest in the
government
education
system
.
Secondly
, it has become difficult to get a lucrative job without passing out from B schools, which is not possible without paying heavy tuition fees.
This
 has resulted in a lack of proper
education
 and
difference
 between the class of rich and poor. To tackle the above-mentioned issues
government
 needs to invest in the
education
system
 so that each student can go to school and college and get a good
education
. Earning a good salary and settling down will curb the disparity gap between rich and poor.
Moreover
, it is the prime responsibility of higher authorities and society to solve
this
 issue and reduce the gap between rich and poor. In conclusion, the
difference
 between the two classes of society is because of the lack of a proper
system
.
This
 problem can be overcome by managing the society and
education
system
 in a proper manner. So, governing bodies should take a lead and improve the
education
system
 which will lessen the disparity between rich and poor.
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