Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

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Nowadays obesity is a big issue and needs to be tackled strongly by our healthcare system. Among new ,generations

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phenomenon is spreading fast and in twenty years the death of cardiovascular or endocrinological diseases, due to obesity, will be doubled. There are several reasons that can explain

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problem, but I think that the main one is evolution.

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, our bodies were created to endure terrible starving conditions, in ,

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fact we are able to survive with only 1000

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per day.

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, thanks to evolution, in western countries, we do not have

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problem anymore ,

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some

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eat more than 3000

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per day.

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, going to McDonald's will increase our caloric intake up to 3500-4000

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, and

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would be fine if we exercised like olympian sportsmen. In fact, we do not move anymore,

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is thanks to cars and buses that made our lives easier and decreased our occasions to burn

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. The solutions to obesity are not easy and straightforward, since there are a lot of reasons why

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eat, sometimes it is for depression, others for trauma, but mainly it is just for boredom. One way to tackle

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problem is knowledge, in , the fact it was proven that the majority of

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do not know the risks of a diet full of saturated fats and sugar.

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, doctors should advertise more about the consequences of food in our daily life and should let their patients know the risk they are undertaking. In conclusion, we will find ourselves with a generation of obese

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, that will decrease our life expectancy and die of totally avoidable diseases. Knowledge is the key, but you can not change it if you do not want to.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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294 words

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Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

have your experience any festival or occasion in different country ? What type of experience you have learnt from it ?

Universities should accept equal numbers of men and women in every subject. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Science is important in the 21st century. How do you think it could be made more appealing to young people?

Prevention is better than cure" Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.