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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #railways #roads
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Railway
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 and
road
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services
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 are the most
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popular
poplular
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popular
 transition in the
worlds
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world
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. Some citizens say that bureaucracy should
use
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 more
money
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 to develop
railways
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railway
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 systems than
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roads
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road
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 structures.
However
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, I think that administrations should
use
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 the same amount of
money
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 on both railways and
roads
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.
To begin
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 with,
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governments
government
goverments
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governments
 should expend capital
to
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on
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railway
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 departments to elevation rail systems because it provides the opportunity to reach
destination
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the destination
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quickly
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more quickly
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 than
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roads
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on roads
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.
In addition
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,
railway
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services
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has
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have
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 less possibility
to
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of
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occurs
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 accidents as compared with
road
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transports
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transport
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. People can go
one
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from one
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railway
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 station to another
to
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apply
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more speedily and safely than
road
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vechiles
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vehicles
 which may
helps
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help
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 to save their valuable
time
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 and life
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, as a result,
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as a result
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 they can
use
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 the
time
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 in
another
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other
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works
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work
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 with full of
attentions
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attention
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.
This
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 may lead to prosper their way of
lives
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life
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. In Bangladesh,
for example
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,
peoples
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people
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 can go
Dhaka
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from Dhaka
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 to Sylhet using railways within two hours whereas using
roads
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it
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apply
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is needed six-seven hours.
Moreover
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, evidence supports that
in
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apply
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last
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 month
in
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on
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 the same route occurred seven major accidents according to Daily Star - a leading newspaper in BD - while there is no incidents in rail systems in that
time
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.
Therefore
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, governments must spend
money
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 on rail-line
services
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. 
On the other hand
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,
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the authority
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authority
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authorities
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 should
also
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 expense funds to improve
structures
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the structures
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 of
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road
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roads
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 cause using
roads
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 to go
one
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from one
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 place to another is the most popular transport in the
worlds
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world
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. Group of individuals can go out in any place including long journey or
short
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a short
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 journey in any
time
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 by
roads
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 whereas
railway
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 system depends on a particular
time
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 resulting in they have to wait for
this
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time
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 possible leading to affect badly in certain cases on people's life.
For instance
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, if a person suddenly
feel
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feels
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 ill and
have
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has
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 to go
hospital
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to hospital
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 immediately,
that
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at that
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time
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 he/she has to
use
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road
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vechiles
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vehicles
such
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ambulance
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an ambulance
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 or others, but he/she cannot
use
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 rail service at that moment. For
these reason
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this reason
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, there is
also
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need
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a need
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 to spend capital on
roads
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. In conclusion,
railway
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 stations and
road
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services
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 are both important for a nation. So, I think administrations should
use
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 the same
money
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 in both sectors to prosper their infrastructure.
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