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Some people think that there will be decrease in international travel in future. Do you think the less amount of international travel is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, International travel is increasing so fast.
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, amount of
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 is going up and
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tourism
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industry
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 improves day by day.
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also
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 many
countries
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 are earning so much from foreign travellers.
On the other
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hand
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peoples
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 are more interested to visit many new
countries
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 across the globe.
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, I must consider the volume of the GDP from
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tourism
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industry
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 for many destination
countries
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 that invest in international tourists. For ,instance Spain is one of the major locations that passengers are looking to visit. and volume of income is one of the important revenue for the
people
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 and government. In ,Fact
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 kinds of services will make rich the majority of the society. because many travellers get a variety of services from many different local
person
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 and spend their money in different points.
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, governments are trying to absorb more
people
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 for visiting their cities and make
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the
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 more fantastic locations in order to expand
tourism
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 districts for new towns or suburbs.
however
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 many
people
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 believe that international travel will be reduced but in my ,opinion I think more
people
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 will join international trips and would visit new cultures and destinations.
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 many
countries
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 get more income from international passengers by getting a visa, using transportation many
entrance
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fair
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 and etc.
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 governments could get more taxes from local businesses too.
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also
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this
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industry
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 make many job opportunities for many
people
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. In conclusion, I believe that
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industry
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be
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increase and improve
more
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GDP and more income for governments on one hand. and on another ,hand the majority of the
people
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 could earn from
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this
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 important services.
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 by
consideration
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 and most attention to
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tourism
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the tourism
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industry
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 many other benefits will appear for
the
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all the
people
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 and
government
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governments
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 across the world.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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