Some people think that there will be decrease in international travel in future. Do you think the less amount of international travel is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, International travel is increasing so fast.
Then
, amount of
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is going up and
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industry
improves day by day.
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many
countries
are earning so much from foreign travellers.
On the other
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peoples
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are more interested to visit many new
countries
across the globe.
Firstly
, I must consider the volume of the GDP from
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industry
for many destination
countries
that invest in international tourists. For ,instance Spain is one of the major locations that passengers are looking to visit. and volume of income is one of the important revenue for the
people
and government. In ,Fact
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kinds of services will make rich the majority of the society. because many travellers get a variety of services from many different local
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and spend their money in different points.
Secondly
, governments are trying to absorb more
people
for visiting their cities and make
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more fantastic locations in order to expand
tourism
districts for new towns or suburbs.
however
many
people
believe that international travel will be reduced but in my ,opinion I think more
people
will join international trips and would visit new cultures and destinations.
Additionally
many
countries
get more income from international passengers by getting a visa, using transportation many
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fair
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and etc.
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governments could get more taxes from local businesses too.
also
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this
industry
make many job opportunities for many
people
. In conclusion, I believe that
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industry
will
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increase and improve
more
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GDP and more income for governments on one hand. and on another ,hand the majority of the
people
could earn from
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important services.
Then
by
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and most attention to
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industry
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many other benefits will appear for
the
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all the
people
and
government
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governments
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across the world.
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