The gap between the rich and the poor is increasingly wide, as poor people become poorer and rich people become richer. What problems could this situations casue? what are the solutions to address those problems?

The problem of poverty has become more and more serious,
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whereas
the group of wealthy
people
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remains
unaffected, which
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the gap between these groups
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wider. In
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problems
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stemmed
from
this
issue
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as hate
crime
and
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classism
will be addressed, and suggestions on how to tackle
such
problems
will
also
be delivered. Standing on the opposite sides of
this
society
, as the friction between the
wealth
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and the poor
people
increased, it could cause
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severe
servere
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severe
issues
such
as
crime
resulting in
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classism
, and the injustice caused by the
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social confrontation.
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is that
people
tend to categorize and make
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on whole
society
by
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income
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. The
people
with higher
salary
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seem to overlook those who are struggling in the poverty situation and vice versa
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so that the hate
crime
could
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arise
.
On the other hand
, it is
also
well-documented that the
people
who are economic weakness are vulnerable to
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raising taxes or some change made by public sectors. As we can see that street
protest
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and
labor
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strike
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in every country increase these years, causing the
mulfunctioning
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malfunctioning
of
the
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society
as well as
the
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devastating influence on national
economy
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growth. The actions, that should be taken
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immediately
immediatly
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immediately
, are government
aids
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aid
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and charity events held by the rich
people
.
First
of all, the public sectors have the most powerful administrative right to overcome
such
obstacle
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.
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, to
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the tax rate, the calculations by income levels should be more detailed. Families with high annual incomes should have more responsibility
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tax paying
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, and make compensation for those who are not able to afford high daily bills.
Secondly
,
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charity events can
also
evoke public awareness
to
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those
weakness
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people
. By making
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donation
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to the group of weakness, the poverty
problems
and the confrontation will
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definitely
definately
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definitely
be improved sooner or later. To sum up, it is obvious that the gap between poor and
wealth
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are
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getting larger. Social issues
such
as the rate of hate
crime
and street protest
seems
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to become normal
problems
. In order to create a
harmony
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society
and eliminate the gap between poor and
wealth
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,
government
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the government
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and those who are eligible should take
actions
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immediately before the situation
get
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worsen.
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