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The gap between the rich and the poor is increasingly wide, as poor people become poorer and rich people become richer. What problems could this situations casue? what are the solutions to address those problems?

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The problem of poverty has become more and more serious,
whereras
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whereas
 the group of wealthy
people
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reamins
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remains
 unaffected, which
cause
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causes
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 the gap between these groups
get
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 wider. In
this
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problems
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are
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stemed
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stemmed
 from
this
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 issue
such
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 as hate
crime
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 and
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classism
 will be addressed, and suggestions on how to tackle
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problems
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 will
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 be delivered. Standing on the opposite sides of
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society
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, as the friction between the
wealth
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wealthy
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 and the poor
people
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 increased, it could cause
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severe
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severe
 issues
such
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 as
crime
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 resulting in
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classism
, and the injustice caused by the
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long-term
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 social confrontation.
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Classism
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 is that
people
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 tend to categorize and make
judge
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judgments
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 on whole
society
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 by
incomes
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income
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. The
people
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 with higher
salary
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salaries
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 seem to overlook those who are struggling in the poverty situation and vice versa
,
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 so that the hate
crime
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 could
arised
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arise
.
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, it is
also
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 well-documented that the
people
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 who are economic weakness are vulnerable to
the
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raising taxes or some change made by public sectors. As we can see that street
protest
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protests
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 and
labor
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labour
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strike
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strikes
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 in every country increase these years, causing the
mulfunctioning
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malfunctioning
 of
the
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society
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 as well as
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 devastating influence on national
economy
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economic
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 growth. The actions, that should be taken
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immediately
immediatly
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immediately
, are government
aids
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aid
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 and charity events held by the rich
people
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.
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 of all, the public sectors have the most powerful administrative right to overcome
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obstacle
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obstacles
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.
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, to
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balance
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 the tax rate, the calculations by income levels should be more detailed. Families with high annual incomes should have more responsibility
to
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tax paying
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tax-paying
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, and make compensation for those who are not able to afford high daily bills.
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,
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charity events can
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 evoke public awareness
to
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of
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 those
weakness
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weak
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people
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. By making
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a donation
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donation
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donations
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 to the group of weakness, the poverty
problems
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 and the confrontation will
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definitely
definately
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definitely
 be improved sooner or later. To sum up, it is obvious that the gap between poor and
wealth
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wealthy
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are
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is
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 getting larger. Social issues
such
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 as the rate of hate
crime
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 and street protest
seems
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 to become normal
problems
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. In order to create a
harmony
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society
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 and eliminate the gap between poor and
wealth
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wealthy
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,
government
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the government
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 and those who are eligible should take
actions
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action
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 immediately before the situation
get
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gets
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 worsen.
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