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The charts below the amount of financial aid that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts give information about how the aid
money
 was spent by China, Indonesia, Thailand, and South
Africa
 and how much they received in the years 1974 and 2014. Overall, the given countries received more financial aid in 1974 than in 2014. They
also
 spent the majority of the
money
 on medicine in 1974, and on finances in 2014. In terms of the allocation of monetary
support
, they spent exact 80
million
 on medical use and 70
million
 on catering and finance individually in the year 1974.
By contrast
, in 2014, these countries used the majority of their
money
 on medical and financial use, with 60
million
 and around 65
million
 respectively.
However
, only about 15
million
 dollars was distributed to use on catering. In regards to how much
money
support
 these four countries got in 1974 and 2014, South
Africa
 received the most
support
money
, with 65
million
 in 1974, China comes in
second
, it got 3
million
 less than those South
Africa
 got (63
million
), followed by Indonesia and Thailand, with 53
million
 and 48
million
 each. In 2014, they all received less
support
 than before, 42 dollars was distributed to South
Africa
, 30
million
 to Indonesia and 18
million
 to Thailand. Meanwhile, China only got 6
million
 of financial aid in the year 2014.
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