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Some people believe that university should offer places for people with high marks, Others says that universities accept all age of people even if they do not well at schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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University
 is a place where
people
 can learn higher subjects,
however
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university
 is not the only place where
people
 can enhance their knowledge base. Society accepts that examination is a proper way to distinguish
people
 who are suitable to continue their studies at a
university
. I strongly agree that universities should offer places for
people
 with high marks.
First
, unlike roads, public parks, or shopping malls, universities need a large amount of various investment that takes over years. A
university
 may not only consist of buildings, teachers and facilities, the intrinsic unseen factors are even more important: teaching materials, accumulated research documents, and the reputation that constantly attracts students and researchers. All these can take decades to be established and well maintained.
Therefore
, the
university
 is a highly limited resource and determined to serve only a few
people
, and those
people
 need to be good enough at learning, studying and research,
otherwise
 the costly resource will be wasted.
Secondly
, the
university
 is not a good choice for all ages of
people
.
University
 education is designed to encourage
people
 to think independently and explore unknown areas of human knowledge. It usually takes three or more years to let a
university
 student be a qualified graduate. Imagine if all
people
 go to
university
 and take years to finish their studies, what would happen to our society? A bus driver who graduated in engineering that can build a rocket or a car dealer who can calculate the orbit of Mars? Students without high marks should take a different routine rather than rush into
university
 and learn unnecessary subjects. To summarise, our
university
 is a limited resource so only a few
people
 should be allowed to attend and
people
 who do not well in school should take a different path in their future.
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