Many people buy products that they do not really need and replace old products with new ones unnecessarily. Why do people buy things they do not really need? Do you think this is a good thing?

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The world is globalizing very fast and marketing is one of the best strategies for humans to feel

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rapid growth.

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, advertising creates human needs which are not necessary to live by. It is true

people

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purchase

items

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that are not necessary for daily lifestyle and

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unreasonably, buy new versions of the same existing product.

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tendency can be categorised as impulsive buying which is a reckless and negative impact on normal life.

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with, Humans are naturally seeking love and attention and try to satisfy these emotions by purchasing luxury or trending products. We live in a competitive world where everyone trying to be ahead of someone by being popular or the centre of attraction.

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, the trouble-free method is to purchase some

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that are not needed.

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tend to buy the newest version of electronic

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like iPhones, beauty

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and clothes.

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people

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will still crave attention, and acceptance and get stuck in a continual loop of satisfaction until the money is too tight to live. In my view, it is a bad practice to spend money on unwanted commodities. First of all, these unwise decisions

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needless trending

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and the new editions of the current products create a life on the breadline even without knowing.

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, I have seen

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ruin their financial stability because they purchased consumer goods,

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as cars, phones, and jewellery that are not affordable.

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, families and individuals struggle to meet their basic needs. In conclusion, unchecked and unhealthy consumerism destroys life and impacts the

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cost of living.

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should encourage their selves to save money

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and invest in business or education to mitigate the risk of destructive consumerism

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The essay adequately addresses the prompt by analyzing the reasons for unnecessary purchases and providing a clear opinion. However, it would benefit from a more detailed analysis and more specific examples.

coherence and cohesion

The essay demonstrates a logical progression of ideas, with a clear introduction and conclusion. The use of transitional devices could be improved to enhance coherence and cohesion.

Your opinion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

292 words

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