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Some people think that people who do physical work should be paid as same as the people who have high level degree. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Money plays a vital role in everybody's life. Some communities believe that pupils should be paid without considering their profession. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some pros and cons of
this
 matter and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
 matter with relevant examples. On the one side, Some
people
 like to
work
 physically meanwhile some other
people
 like to
work
 mentally with their
degrees
. Some communities choose their profession based on their interest.
For example
, if a person, who wants to
work
 mentally by sitting in a cabin chooses the software field with the help of his/her degree. And another good example is, A person, who has an interest in agriculture,
chooses
Correct word choice
and chooses
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 to farm as his/her profession. Based on the
people
's convenience they are choosing their
work
. So it is better to provide equal
wages
 because some may be good at doing
work
 physically while others are good at doing their
work
 with their knowledge. On the other side, In
this
 modern era, there is huge competition around the world. Without
degrees
, it is tough to get settled in their career. Based on their
degrees
people
 are getting
wages
. Nowadays,
people
 are trying very hard to get good scores and do higher studies for better
degrees
. In
this
 competitive world,
the
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 degree is important and plays a vital role to live a significant life.
For example
,
People
 are going abroad for their higher studies because with higher
degrees
people
 are getting more
wages
. And based on working hours
also
people
 are getting more
wages
. To sum up, In
this
 world, Everyone is equal. But due to competition payments are being given based on their
degrees
.
Otherwise
, every person will get equal
wages
 without hard
work
.
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