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A lot of old people suffering from loneliness these days. They also lack physical fitness. What are the reasons for these? Can you think of possible solutions?

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Nowadays, it is irrefutable that the life expectancy of old generations is getting shorter ,
However
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 they are not physically fit and prefer to live alone.
Although
 there are some researches that have been carried out, resulting some solutions and its
causes
. that will be articulated in upcoming paragraphs. initiating with the
causes
. The predominant reason is an environment to elaborate, in
this
 modern era.
Although
 there are some technologies that have been introduced to us, by which health problems can be cured, it
causes
 a massive amount of damage to the environment, which makes older
people
 hard to survive it cause some critical illnesses to them.
Moreover
, their physical strength
also
 becomes weak and resulting some
people
 may suffer from serious problems like paralyse.
Secondly
, Families are getting more attentive towards their work, whereas Children are busy
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 their schooling, by that, they do not get enough time, which they can use to talk with their older parents. Resulting in them suffering from loneliness and they become introverts.
For example
, 40% of individuals live separate from older
people
, as they feel hard to take care of them and the remaining 60% of Individuals are favoring their work more rather than their elders.
Thus
, they feel alone and
also
 become physically and mentally weak. Despite the aforementioned
causes
, there are some solutions to tackle them.
Firstly
, the government has constructed some parks away from polluted areas. by planting trees ,especially for old generations in which they can do some physical exercise in the arms of nature, resulting to enhance their immune system as well as increase their life expectancy. Another solution is those old
people
 can find the same masses with whom they can talk or play.
Moreover
, working
people
 and youngsters should give them time to talk about their past activities and supervise them.
For instance
, Recently, authorities have announced a law. Elders can register the file against
people
 who try to torture them, resulting 10,000 dollars fine with 3 years of jail. To sum ,up everything that has been stated so far,
Although
 there are several reasons like poor environment and shortage of time. but there are some measures that can be followed to overcome the problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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