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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

#students #study #colleges #universities #country
Nowadays a debatable topic is that a
prominent
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 number of
students
 enter for studies at
universities
 overseas than local
universities
. It has advantages and disadvantages. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides. On the one hand, most
students
 have considered
to study
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 at foreign
universities
 because the highest education is a crucial part of its society and the reason prefers
to
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foreign
universities
, which contained in quality of innovative education system and supportive teaching
staffs
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, there are common advantages, which contribute to us, the main benefit is that studying at foreign
universities
students
 can encounter with different cultural people,
as a result
, it would help to learn new languages and share their knowledge with different cultural people.
For instance
,
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a
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English speaking
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 country like Australia that a prominent number of Asian
students
 study at Australian
universities
.
Moreover
, another benefit is that
students
 can work as part-time workers in a study country because
students
 can collect some money and can pay for their extra expenditures.
On the other hand
, the negative aspect of
this
 phenomenon is that the country's money transfer
to
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overseas
it
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becomes a serious problem in less-developed countries
consequently
, it would
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 the nation's economic growth.
For example
, in undeveloped countries' educational institutions have low incomes.
Furthermore
, another drawback is that foreign courses are more expensive, obviously, everyone could not afford course fees because
students
 would take loans that way,
students
 would pay
on
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 a long period, In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic, studying at foreign
universities
have
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 a significant part in
the
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community life. It
also
 has advantages and disadvantages.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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