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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

#students #study #colleges #universities #country
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Nowadays a debatable topic is that a
prominent
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 number of
students
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 enter for studies at
universities
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 overseas than local
universities
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. It has advantages and disadvantages. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides. On the one hand, most
students
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 have considered
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 at foreign
universities
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 because the highest education is a crucial part of its society and the reason prefers
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foreign
universities
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, which contained in quality of innovative education system and supportive teaching
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, there are common advantages, which contribute to us, the main benefit is that studying at foreign
universities
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students
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 can encounter with different cultural people,
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, it would help to learn new languages and share their knowledge with different cultural people.
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a
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English speaking
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 country like Australia that a prominent number of Asian
students
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 study at Australian
universities
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.
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, another benefit is that
students
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 can work as part-time workers in a study country because
students
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 can collect some money and can pay for their extra expenditures.
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, the negative aspect of
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 phenomenon is that the country's money transfer
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overseas
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becomes a serious problem in less-developed countries
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, it would
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 the nation's economic growth.
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, in undeveloped countries' educational institutions have low incomes.
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, another drawback is that foreign courses are more expensive, obviously, everyone could not afford course fees because
students
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 would take loans that way,
students
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 would pay
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 a long period, In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic, studying at foreign
universities
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have
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 a significant part in
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community life. It
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 has advantages and disadvantages.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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