IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

The use of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages

#media #facebook #twitter #contact #century #trend
Social media is a huge problem in the world these days. Definitely, the disadvantages of social media outweigh the advantages. When looking at Facebook, Twitter and Instagram,
for example
, there are a lot of fake accounts and dangerous activity happening on the internet. On these platforms, people are spending so much of their time speaking with strangers and sometimes planning to meet people that they don't know anything about.
First
, when people have face-to-face contact with one another they can see each other's facial expressions and it's more intimate. When you are talking to someone online, sometimes their profile picture is so outdated or modified by applications that change their appearance.
Also
 on the shitty computer, there are thieves. They hack accounts every day so it is unsafe to use the crazy websites.
For example
, once I bought a ticket to go to Wonderland with my boyfriend at the moment and I was sold a fucking fake ass ticket and I was so pissed off. I got to the big bold gate at the amusement park and the guy told me the thing I bought was not real and I had to pay double the price right there. Overall, I hate the internet and wish everyone on it would go to hell. In conclusion, I think that social media is bullshit and I will never have a Facebook account. I'm going to delete that ridiculous app right now. It is a waste of my money. There are so many dumb advertisements that make me want to travel to the moon or other countries and I spend one thousand dollars every day on dumb poop.
Submitted by luchitoxl5000 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: