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Government should spend money on medical research and less on researching the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #research #environment
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Medical research and environmental problems are major trends and the
government
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 focus on both sectors effectively. Some people believe that the
government
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 should spend enormous
money
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 on medical research and less on researching the environment. I strongly disagree with
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 opine and I think that the
authorities
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 should invest equal
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 in both sectors and I will explain my reasons for it in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, medical research is done in order to improve the healthcare system and to provide better quality facilities to the public.
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, the
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 should spend their
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 on researching new viruses and finding cures for them, which help the community to get relief from these viruses like "Corona".
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,
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 the
authorities
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 should invest their fund to buy new instruments, which is helpful for doctors to operate on a particular person very effectively.
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, the
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 should
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 equally spend their
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 on the environment to help the public from the climate change problem.
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, the
government
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 should produce more electric vehicles in the market compared to diesel and petrol vehicles and
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, the community can stay away from pollution problems which occur due to enormous petrol vehicles on the road.
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, the
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 should spend funds on building factories in regional areas and
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, the population in big cities will decrease dramatically.
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, if the
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 build factories in regional areas
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 people will not migrate from village to cities for employment. To conclude, I strongly agree with
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 statement and I think that the
government
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 should invest an equal amount of
money
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 in both medical sectors as well as in environmental problems to help the public to live in a good climate with standard facilities.
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