The restoration of old buildings in major cities throughout the world often involves numerous government expenditures. This money will bring more benefits if it is used to provide new housing or road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the new era, more and more
buildings
have been built to serve the population growth.
Besides
, in the
future
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these
buildings
in enormous municipalities around the earth will need to be upgraded and it will strongly affect government finance, in lieu of fixing old structures
this
expenditure can assist to supply more accommodation and
roadway
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to create
a
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convenient
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for citizens. From my point of view, I partly disagree that old
buildings
will be abandoned and collapsed for some reasons I mentioned below.
To begin
with, Old structures
such
as
buildings
that are national and characteristic of those territories must be kept and restored, Especially edifices that are symbolic and are the face of countries related to diplomacy and political development.
Moreover
, the
buildings
related to religion
such
as pagodas and churches are
also
crucial to reinstate and preserve.
For example
, the Giza pyramid should be regenerated to keep the ancient and the mystery of
this
historical construct.
Hence
, expenditure
of
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Fixing edifices
cost
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an arm and a leg so
that
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religious and symbolic ones should be prioritized for repair. Meanwhile, with modernization and urbanization, more and more demand for places of residence for citizens. People enjoy working and living in new modern
buildings
inside the
center
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of the metropolitan area convenient for commuting and shopping
such
as towers, skyscrapers and luxury apartments. These
buildings
help people with limited income have the opportunity to buy a home for them
instead
of having to buy expensive plots of land and
then
build a house.
For instance
, the
buildings
in big cities that we often see are filled with high-rise
buildings
competing to
rise
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because vacant land is increasingly rare.
Therefore
, the state should spend investment funds to develop more and more modern urban areas to respond to the fast pace of life in today's era. In conclusion, the Government should use expenditures for fabricating new homes and routes to expand opportunities
of
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buying houses for residents. And
also
repair important historical
buildings
of the countries.
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