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Band 7

You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time. Write a letter to the library. Explain what has happened and tell them what you want to do about it.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to explain why I have been unable to return the book I borrowed for 7
days
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, which is now overdue. Actually, a few
days
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 back I received a letter from my father that my grandmother
has
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had
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 been diagnosed with a fetal condition called "Liver cirrhosis", and she needs immediate treatment for that, Doctors
also
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 recommended that surgery should be done urgently to Prevent the whole liver get damaged. My grandmother and I have a good bond with each other,
Therefore
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 she wanted to see me before she underwent the operation. so, I booked a flight and reached here the next day. we met and I motivated her for the operation and it went successful. Unfortunately, I will not be able to reach there on time to submit the books as I have to be here for a few more
days
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 to give my family emotional support. I will be beyond grateful if you can extend my limit for the next 5
days
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 as I cannot do it physically on the computer or else I have to pay extra for it. You will find my library card in an
enclose
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enclosed
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 envelope
along with
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this
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 letter. Thank you for the help! Yours faithfully, XYZ

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coherence cohesion
Ensure the reasons and the request are logically organized. For example, mention the situation and then explain about the request.
task achievement
Remove minor language errors for a clearer, more formal tone. For instance, avoid informal contractions like 'so' and 'we' especially in formal writing.
task achievement
The tone is polite and formal, which suits the context of the letter.
greeting and closing
Salutation and complementary close are appropriately used.
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