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Some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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There is a common debate among experts on the advantages and
disadvantages
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 of children learning a foreign
language
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 at primary
school
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 over secondary
school
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 and I would attempt to discuss
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 statement here on with adequate examples, in support of its advantages that may outweigh the latter.
Firstly
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, kids start learning at a very tender age,
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 exposing the primary curriculum to a foreign
language
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 does have its benefits.
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, the educational system in Sri Lanka brought about recent reforms to allow students to opt for the English medium at a primary level over the native
language
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 Sinhala. I too am a product of these educational reforms which enabled me to very quickly adapt to the change in the
language
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 during my higher studies, over many others who had not had
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 advantage while yet in Primary
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. Statistics suggest that over 70% of those who studied in the English medium, have been able to secure higher marks in their higher studies.
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 was very much the case with many that passed out during my time.
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, one of the
disadvantages
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 of
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 would be that students would pay less attention to the native languages which will invariably mean that they would forget their mother tongue.
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, in the context of Sri Lanka,
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 would have far fewer
disadvantages
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 as Sinhala is not an acceptable
language
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 in the modern corporate world. In Conclusion, it is quite evident that there are far too many advantages, rather than
disadvantages
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 to children being thought a foreign
language
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 in primary
school
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 rather than secondary college.
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