You and your family are moving to another country, and you are looking for rented accommodation there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter Explain when and why you are moving Give your preference for the location of the accommodation Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find

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Dear Mark, My name is Maria. I am writing

this

letter to apprise you that I am looking for

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accommodation

accomadation

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accommodation

in Bristol.

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and my family is planning to move by

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December

Decemember

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December

10th, 2022 from Princeton. My father is working as a Bank manager

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Queensland Bank. Recently he got a transfer to the Bristol branch.

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, I took the admission for my

Bachelors

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degree

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Bristol University. We are looking for

the

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apartment close to the university with all the amenities. We are planning to buy a car for my father,

hence

apartment

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the apartment

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should need a parking slot of its own. My mother is a homemaker,so she prefers to stay in a place where she can buy fresh vegetables and fruits and other household stuff.

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and my brother prefer to go to

gym

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daily, looking for

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a place

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place

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where we can go to

gym

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the gym

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nearby

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near by

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Moreover

, we prefer to have a clean and calm place. We prefer to have a 3 bedroom apartment with

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at least

atleast

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2 washrooms, a spaced kitchen,

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hall and a guest room.

Balcony

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is mandatory

where

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my mother likes to plant herbs. We are looking for a

centeralized

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air conditioning flat. It will be well and good if it is furnished. I really appreciate

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you could find an

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appropriate

approriate

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appropriate

house

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us at the earliest. Let me know if you need any other details from my end. Yours faithfully, Maria

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