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You and your family are moving to another country, and you are looking for rented accommodation there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter Explain when and why you are moving Give your preference for the location of the accommodation Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find

#country #accommodation #property #agent #location #type #hope
Dear Mark, My name is Maria. I am writing
this
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an
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accommodation
accomadation
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accommodation
 in Bristol.
Me
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 and my family is planning to move by
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December
Decemember
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December
 10th, 2022 from Princeton. My father is working as a Bank manager
in
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 Queensland Bank. Recently he got a transfer to the Bristol branch.
Also
, I took the admission for my
Bachelors
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 degree
in
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 Bristol University. We are looking for
the
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 apartment close to the university with all the amenities. We are planning to buy a car for my father,
hence
apartment
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the apartment
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 should need a parking slot of its own. My mother is a homemaker,so she prefers to stay in a place where she can buy fresh vegetables and fruits and other household stuff.
Me
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 and my brother prefer to go to
gym
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the gym
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 daily, looking for
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a place
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place
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 where we can go to
gym
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the gym
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nearby
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near by
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.
Moreover
, we prefer to have a clean and calm place. We prefer to have a 3 bedroom apartment with
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at least
atleast
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at least
 2 washrooms, a spaced kitchen,
dinning
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 hall and a guest room.
Balcony
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The balcony
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 is mandatory
where
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and
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 my mother likes to plant herbs. We are looking for a
centeralized
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centralized
centralised
 air conditioning flat. It will be well and good if it is furnished. I really appreciate
if
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 you could find an
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appropriate
approriate
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appropriate
 house
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 us at the earliest. Let me know if you need any other details from my end. Yours faithfully, Maria
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