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Thank you letter. Write a letter to supermarket's manager to thank them

#supermarket #manager
Dear Sir or Madam My full name is Xasanov Ozodbek. The reason why I am addressing you is that, thanks to
supermarket
 service.
To begin
 with, I bought somethings from your
supermarket
. I am very grateful with service.
For instance
:
supermarket
 is full of different kind of
products
. I could not find important things that I wanted to buy. And I asked to workers to help me to find some
products
.
That is
 why, they helped me to find some important
products
. I felt so good.
Also
 I thanked to workers and they carry my things to my home with
supermarket
's car.
Nevertheless
, I saw some uncomfortable stuffs.
For example
:
products
 are not fresh, milk is so old and I did not like
supermarket
's bread. You have control
this
 things. Your Faithfully Ozodbek
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Task Achievement
Start by clearly stating the purpose of your letter in the introduction. You can do this by saying something more direct and specific like: "I am writing to express my sincere gratitude for the exceptional service I received at your supermarket."
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your letter follows a coherent structure: introduction, body paragraphs explaining your points, and a conclusion. Stick to one idea per paragraph to improve clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use paragraphs to organize your thoughts more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single topic, such as your initial experience, the assistance from workers, and areas for improvement.
Task Achievement
For a more natural and engaging tone, include specific details about what you appreciated. For instance, mention the names of products you found or the specific way in which the staff helped you.
General Improvement
Work on using a wider range of vocabulary and more complex sentence structures to better express yourself and to make your writing more interesting.
General Improvement
Be cautious with spelling and grammar. Avoid writing in one large block of text and use commas, periods, and paragraphs to break up your text for easier reading.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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