Many people these days travel far for work or spend more hours working. Does this trend have more advantages or disadvantages? What do you think about work-life balance?

There has been a heated debate recently over workaholism and commuting long distances to
work
. In my opinion, the disadvantages of being highly involved in
work
affairs outweigh the advantages, and it is well advised to strike a balance between
work
and personal affairs. It is beyond doubt that excessive hours spent at the workplace and working would be detrimental to
people
more than perceptions. For one thing, it is well known that
people
have limited physical capabilities, and having to
work
a lot will have dire consequences for their health. In essence, it is inevitable that fatigue and lethargy will undermine your ability to pursue your career for as long as you don't allocate sufficient time to shake them off.
In other words
, failure to strike a happy medium between
work
and relaxation can lead to irreversible physical damage.
Additionally
,
people
who commute long distances to get to
work
often have to endure hours of driving their own car or the stress and anxiety associated with travelling by public transportation, as the city generally tends to be overcrowded. I have personally experienced times when there was no occasion to be detained for the
next
subway train and,
as a result
, there is no alternative but to board the immediate train ended up feeling pressed and depressed because of the cramped conditions caused to me in overcrowded wagons.
Additionally
, I had been afflicted with viral diseases on a few occasions, so some of my annual leave was wasted. The best interests of citizens would be served by adopting a well-balanced lifestyle. Particularly, striking a balance between
work
and family
life
can be extremely beneficial for
people
, since the needs of their families need to be met emotionally. In my elder brother's case, he ended his
life
in sentimental separation due to his negligence of his wife and child in the pursuit of his occupation.
Therefore
, the population should be taught to
work
in a way that protects their emotions and physical safety.
Furthermore
, you and your family will not be able to consign your lifelong worries and apprehensions to oblivion if your
work
replaces your highly recommended leisure time.
This
type of excess pressure will invariably build up on your family's shoulders, and since
then
you will never be able to handle all hardships in a timely manner, so you will lose all opportunities to have wonderful times with your children, and they will be emotionally damaged, which will spoil their future family
life
. Having considered the arguments mentioned above, I am of the opinion that families can benefit both now and in the future by achieving an equilibrium between
work
,
life
, and relaxation, and by putting an end to unrealistic involvement in occupations.
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