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Some people think students should be encouraged to work or travel after finishing secondary education and before starting university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Share your own experience and examples.

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Students
 are often encouraged to study. It is often argued by some people that youngsters should be motivated to take a break from their education before commencing higher
studies
. I believe that it is important for the youth to explore themselves before pursuing their graduation. Though there are several merits associated with
this
 trend, I think that there are a few downsides connected with
this
 approach.
To begin
 with, encouraging
students
 to travel and gain some work
experience
 has two main benefits. One of them is youngsters can get a good amount of time to explore the world, meet people and become socially active. Young minds can
experience
 new cultures and become socially more engaging.
Moreover
, if
students
 gain some work
experience
 prior to getting started with their higher education, they can understand their skills and choose their career paths wisely.
This
 will lead to career satisfaction in the long term. To cite an example, many
students
 living in South Asian countries prefer gaining some work
experience
 to identify their potential and make wise career decisions. Though there are many benefits associated with
this
 trend, there are a few downsides linked with
this
 approach.
Firstly
, if
students
 take breaks for a longer duration, they can lose touch with their
studies
 and their knowledge can easily vanish.
As a result
, youngsters will struggle to cope with their
studies
 later.
In addition
, many
students
 can undergo high levels of stress feeling that they are lacking behind peers of their same age.
Such
 feelings of guilt can demotivate the youth and they would not be able to concentrate on their education. To conclude, though taking a break before commencing higher
studies
 has obvious benefits, I think that if
this
 gap is for a longer time it can demotivate the
students
.
Thus
 resulting in stress and lack of concentration.
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