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There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter: describe the problems explain how these problems are affecting you and others suggest what could be done about it

#transport #manager #company
Dear sir, We found many problems with your service. And I am writing to introduce my opinion,
how
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 to reduce it. We use your service every single day,
however
, nowadays we have numerous problems with your service.
Firstly
,
buses
 didn’t arrive on
time
 at the bus stop.
Secondly
,
that
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 are very old and not comfortable for anyone.
Thirdly
, the services are limited.
Due to
this
, problems affected us in many ways. Some drivers travel slowly they never manage their
time
, because, we
were
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 unable to go, to work and school on
time
. and some
buses
 are not suitable for pregnant women and elderly people so, The seat has been broken.
moreover
, the lack of
buses
waste
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 our valuable
time
. Because of
this
, I have so many opinions for reducing
this
 problem. Encourage the bus drivers to work on
time
. And rapier the poor condition
buses
,
additionally
 allocated new
buses
 with young drivers. If I were your sit, I would invest develop to transportation. I hope you accept my suggestion and attention to
this
 matter as soon as possible. Dhanushka, Faithfully.
Submitted by dhanushkalakmal19 on

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task achievement
Make sure to correct grammar and punctuation errors to improve readability.
coherence cohesion
Organize paragraphs more clearly, each focusing on a single main idea.
task achievement
Use more specific and detailed examples to describe the problems and their impact.
coherence cohesion
Improve the transitions between ideas to ensure the letter flows more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your letter.
task achievement
The suggestions for improvement are practical and show a proactive approach.
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