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The government should lower the budget on art in order to allocate more money to education. To what extent do you agree?

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It is often argued that the government should reduce the budget for arts and prioritise
education
, In
this
 essay , I strongly agree with
this
 statement because
education
 is key to having highly qualified
people
 and economic development by choosing art development from their own source.
To begin
 with, increasing the
education
 budget produces more highly qualified
people
 in the
country
.
This
 gives opportunities to an individual to study full time and excels in their career path as
people
 can focus on study and produce better results. A nation can have more qualified skilled workers
such
 as doctors, nurses and accountants which is in demand in many countries today. If
people
 are educated, they can find work easily and
this
 reduces the unemployment rate in the
country
 which reduces the poverty level and crime rate as well. When
people
 are employed, it improves their living standard and they can invest in their own arts and make it one of the leisure activities.
On the other hand
, there will be economic growth. A recent study found that Singapore nation has invested most in the
education
 sector and producing highly skilled
people
 which has attracted the most head offices in their
country
 resulting in more income in the
country
.
Moreover
, when a
country
 where has highly qualified
people
 more call centres are outsourced to them and
this
also
 boosts their economic expansion. In conclusion, the government should invest more in
education
 which results in highly skilled
people
 and the development of the nation as well while
people
 can meet the cost of arts for their leisure.
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