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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You have been invited to attend an admissions interview for a prestigious college. Unfortunately, you cannot come at the proposed time due to a previous appointment. Write a letter to the admissions tutor and explain your position. In your letter: Introduce yourself and state your interest in the program Apologize and offer to come at a different time

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I am not able to attend an admission interview at 9AM on 5th April
due to
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 my doctor's appointment. My name is Jane Smith. I applied for the Chinese Business Program. My applicant number is B24405. I am interested in the Chinese language, culture and business structure.
As
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apply
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China has an enormous effect on world markets and trading. It would be a good opportunity for me to gain more knowledge in
this
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 field. I do apologise that I will not be able to attend it on time
due to
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 my doctor's appointment. I need to get my breast checked as the doctor said there is something suspicious, which requires getting an X-RAY. I would like to ask if it is possible to get another time slot for the interview. It would be great if I could please have an approximate 2PM time
slot
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 as the health examination might take a whole morning. I look forward to your response. Your Sincerefully, Jane Smiths

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Add one short line to ask for a new day and time.
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Use a more formal tone. Do not give too much private health detail.
coherence and cohesion
Make the last line more polite and clear.
coherence and cohesion
Check the closing words and name form.
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You say who you are and which program you want.
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You explain why you cannot come and you ask for a new time.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main idea.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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