Some people believe that restoration of old building costs too much. We should demolish them and build new one instead. Do you agree or disagree?

Renovation is a responsible way of using resources because it involves the preservation of what we have already built. Of course, rebuilding can sometimes be expensive. Still, it is better than building altogether new structures. Restoration
also
helps preserve our heritage. Old properties often
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a story to tell. They are windows to the past. When we restore a building, we are preserving our heritage and a part of our history. The major cost involved in restoration is the cost of labour and
that is
the best thing about it. Restoration creates jobs and improves the local economy without
further
depleting our natural resources. Building a new house requires a lot of materials including wood, bricks, steel, cement and sand. When new
equity
mushrooms in cities and towns, we lose forests. Sand mining has caused the death of many a river. When sand beds disappear rivers lose their ability to retain water. And when rivers dry out, water scarcity occurs.
This
can lead to the loss of crops and cattle and has become quite an issue in many countries. What’s more, when new
equity
is built after demolishing old
equity
, we need to dispose of the cement and concrete. Failure to do so will lead to a major environmental issue. Of course, some
equity
cannot be restored.
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in cities where space is an
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there is a need to demolish old and dilapidated structures and create new high-rises.
This
is necessary to provide housing to a large number of people. Rehabilitation is not advisable in
this
case. In conclusion, revival can be expensive but it must be promoted because it does not leave a negative impact on the environment. Building new structures should be permitted only in cases where rehabilitation is not possible.
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