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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that economical development is the most significant factor in a country's improvement. While government propound the idea that economics must be our
first
 priority, people held on that other advancement types are
also
 important for the nation.
Although
 both views have equally compelling arguments in support of themselves that are going to be discussed,
this
 essay inclines towards the
first
 opinion. On the one hand, economic progress is essential for general development.
In other words
, without the required financial support other parts can not be improved.
For instance
, for the improvement of medicine and the health of residents, high-quality hospitals and technologies are needed.
However
, for them to be presented finances are highly significant.
Therefore
, it is almost impossible to improve other directions without improving finance.
On the other hand
, sometimes total concentration on economical development leads to low support for other aspects.
In addition
, aspects
such
 as cultural and scientific advancement may be forgotten.
Consequently
, both people and the government being too concentrated on money can disadvantage artists and others.
For example
, after 2016 Kazakhstan concentrated on the growth of economics, which significantly decreased the quantity of sports achievements. In my opinion, despite the risk of having a too high concentration on economics, other progress requires a certain quantity of money.
For instance
, education can not be improved without better professors and school programs.
Therefore
, economic progress has to have a slightly higher place compared to others. To conclude,
although
 there are several drawbacks, I am convinced to assert that, economical improvement has to be the most important goal of the government.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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