Some people think that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym/health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Nowadays unhealthy
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lifestyle
life style
effect for most Correct your spelling
lifestyle
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diseases
deseaces
. Some people think that the best way to stay fit is to join a Correct your spelling
diseases
health
club or gym. While others think that doing day to day
activities Add a hyphen
day-to-day
such
as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. In my opinion, join
Wrong verb form
joining
club
or gym is Correct article usage
a club
more
than better Correct quantifier usage
apply
to burn
calories. The following examples highlight my opinion with relevant examples.
Change the verb form
burning
Firstly
, in the past
most everyday activities are doing in physically. Add a comma
,past
However
, these days every facility have
a walking distance and we get Correct subject-verb agreement
has
use
to various technical devices to house holding chores. So I think that it is Change the verb form
used
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definitely
definetely
not enough Correct your spelling
definitely
for
stay Change preposition
to
health
Replace the word
healthy
in
these days. Change preposition
apply
For example
, recent research conducted by the university of “Colombo” discovered that most of
Change preposition
apply
people
prefer to Add an article
the people
driving
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drive
car
rather than Add an article
a car
the car
walking
and Wrong verb form
walk
using
Wrong verb form
use
Correct article usage
a lift
lift
Fix the agreement mistake
lifts
instead
climbing
stairs. They are not active at least once a day. It’s very harmful Change preposition
of climbing
for
our immune system as well.
Change the preposition
to
Secondly
, join
Wrong verb form
joining
a fitness centers
Correct the article-noun agreement
a fitness center
fitness centers
have
facilities Correct subject-verb agreement
has
such
as motivating
, Replace the word
motivation
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advising
advicing
, Correct your spelling
advice
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exercises
excercises
, Correct your spelling
exercises
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diet
diat
plan, providing some information about right angles and movement. There are more knowledgeable Correct article usage
a diat
instractors
and they Correct your spelling
instructors
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guide
give
gide
and always Correct your spelling
guide
supervice
us. Correct your spelling
supervise
This
is the key reason for participation. Moreover
, they execute yoga facilities to improve Correct your spelling
colleagues
collagues
mental Correct your spelling
colleagues
health
too.
In conclusion, participation
Correct article usage
the participation
of
Change preposition
in
gym
or Correct article usage
a gym
health
club is much better for men and women who like in
busy life and it’s not enough to Change preposition
apply
walking
and Replace the word
walk
climbing
because of the use Replace the word
climb
as
technical devices Change preposition
of
as
smooth these activities.Change preposition
to
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