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Some people think that uniform is a good idea for a company. To what extent do you agree or disgree?

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Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about more and more companies asking their
staff
 to wear uniforms at the workplace.
However
, whether it is good thinking for employees to wear the same working
clothes
 is a controversial issue. My view is that it is good for a
company
 to let their
staff
 wear the same design of
clothes
 at the workplace.
First
, it is obvious that
uniform
 is good for companies to improve their band. A good design
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the
uniform
 can catch customers’ eyes and give a good
first
 impression to customers. So customers will have more confidence to choose the
service
 or products from
this
company
.
Moreover
, it is easier for people to look for customer
service
 when all
staff
 are wearing uniforms.
For example
, a person who wants to buy a new phone from the apple store, once he went into the shop, will know whom he should ask for
service
 as soon as possible.
Therefore
, customers will have a good shopping experience at the beginning.
That is
 not to say that
uniform
 does not have any disadvantages. Of course, some
staff
 do not like to wear work
clothes
,
this
 is because they think the
uniform
 is not as comfortable as their own
clothes
. But not everyone has the same feeling. In summary, every
company
 should have their own
uniform
 due to improve its band power or provide better customer
service
. Meanwhile, some of the
staff
 may not like to wear a
uniform
 because it is uncomfortable. By doing so we can make sure that the
company
 can provide their employees with good design and quality work
clothes
.
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