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Some people think it is better to spend and enjoy their money once they earn it. Others think it is better to save their money and enjoy it in the future. Which stand do you agree with and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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It has been a great controversy for many years if an individual should save their earnings to enjoy in the
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 or spend their income when they earn it. wealth is an asset that helps us in good and bad times. But what is the best method of handling the capital that we earn ? Some people believe that the best way is to save their
money
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 and enjoy it in the
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. I completely agree with
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 will support my opinion with examples.
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 as we know is so uncertain. You cannot predict what will happen with your
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 of spending your savings or your earnings you can save it for the bad days in
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, due to inflation prices of goods and services are rising enormously and if you spend all your
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 now you might end up with nothing for the
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, that's why there are many programs and schemes introduced by financial institutions to help one save for the
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 to help one cope with any uncertainties
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 as medical emergencies. Another reason why I agree that it is preferable to save our income for the
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 is that if we save now , we can double or triple our savings by accumulating interest from the bank .
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 of rushing if we know how to handle our finances well we can have a lot of
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 to spend on both luxury items and necessary goods in the
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. Let's take my parents,
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, they always encouraged me to save
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, there are myriads of people who prefer to spend their income while they earn it.They believe in living in the moment and fulfilling their desires and wants whenever they want.
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 it is a common belief that you need to enjoy your
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 as you never know how long will you live,
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 what is the benefit of saving
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 for
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 in my bank for any uncertainties in
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.Personally , I think everyone should try to save their
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 and enjoy it later in their
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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