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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home

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Nowadays a lot of people
works
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 from their homes and
this
 is definitely
good
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a good
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 option for all humanity including our planet. The planet Earth will be much cleaner today because of working from
home
 leads to decreasing
of
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in
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 car pollution and the quality of air is getting worst. So, let`s discuss
about
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the advantages and disadvantages in
this
 essay.
First
 of all, I would like to start with
benefits
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 of working from
home
. In my opinion, the main reason and positive effect
it
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is
time
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the time
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 economy. There is no need to spend time on transportation and
this
 is
huge
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 or the biggest plus,
therefore
, people could have two more hours in their
freetime
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free time
free-time
 activities.
Also
, the traffic jams have to disappear, in that case, the number of car drivers is going down.
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, the capital of France decided to cancel
high
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 polluted machines in factories and the quality of Paris became one of the
most
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cleanest. One of the disadvantages
lays
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lies
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on
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in
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 human
behavior
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behaviour
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.
Home
 is
not
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no
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place
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a place
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 for a
full time
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full-time
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 job and not all
proffesion
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profession
professions
 could afford it.
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, policemen should protect the community on
streets
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the streets
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not
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,not
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 at
home
.
Moreover
,
the
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miscommunication
added
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is added
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in
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to
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this
 question because it will be difficult to communicate with co-workers and do
job
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the job
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. The
last
 minus
consist
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in
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of
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 health and it can be very
damageable
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for
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to
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brain
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. To sum up, we discussed the benefits and the other side of working from
home
. I think that
,
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 in near
future
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,future
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 a huge number of people will work in
distance
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a distance
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.
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