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Some People believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, while other think that crime is a result of bad company. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays crime is increasing day by day which affects society. There are many reasons, some
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 believe that it is due to differences in class, as the poor wanted to become rich.
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, some believe that the only reason for misconduct is to have bad company. I believe that both are the main reasons for the breach of the law in the community.
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 as the country is going through with financial crisis , companies are withdrawing employees from their workplaces and
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 are getting unemployed.To meet the needs of their loved ones and pay utility bills,
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 do commit crimes.
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, the poor population get more complex when seeing that the rich
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 enjoy all the luxuries of life whereas, for ,them it is difficult to even provide food on the table for their families.
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 takes them to commit crimes.
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 one reason which moves the person towards stealing. Young lads get into peer pressure and bullying ,
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 lack of parental guidance took them into drug addiction.
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, crime is at times
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 associated with images of power , courage and gaining attention. In my opinion, I believe that crime is basically due to poorness and unemployment.
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, it is the government's responsibility to provide all the basic needs to the citizen so that they can live with prosperity and peace.
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