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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffereing from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

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There is a worrying phenomenon that
people
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 are getting more
health
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 problems because of having too much fast
food
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. While some suggest imposing a
tax
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 on fast
food
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, I still think the effectiveness of
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 policy is limited.
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, I believe that introducing other policies are far more important to increase individuals’ awareness of
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 issues. The effect of adding a
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 on fast
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 is questionable. Introducing
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 will mainly raise the retail price of the
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 it can decrease the incentive of buying it as the cost increase, a majority of
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 would actually just shift to another kind of fast
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 only, without understanding the message concerning the
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 issue behind the
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. One of the most important features of fast
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 is to be cheap so that the poor can get meals at more affordable prices. It is very likely that rising
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 for fast
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 increases their expenditures on
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, which
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 reduce their freedom to choose the
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.
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, I believe that there are different levels of measures to reduce
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 problems. Fast
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 companies should be forced to provide information about their products,
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 as the ingredients, calories, and warning labels just like cigarettes. For the government, more promotion and education on having healthy
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 and regular exercise should be delivered to the general public. The government can
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 subsidize the companies that sell organic
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food
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 to lower the price as much as fast
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. Individuals should be encouraged to do daily exercise and have body checks each year In conclusion, while some
people
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 would agree the number of
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 suffering from
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 problems can reduce by imposing a
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 on fast
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, I disagree that the policy could help and strongly believe that there are a lot of alternative measures done by the government, companies and the general public to promote the public awareness on the
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 issue.
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  • Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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