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Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely, and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in an independent house. Discuss both views and give your opinions

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Urbanisation has led to more people living in high-rise buildings
instead
 of living in independent
houses
. Some believe that
such
apartments
 are more secure,
however
, others are of the view that
such
 property types lead to families being unhappy and more isolated. I support the latter view and
this
 essay will discuss both opinions in detail.
Firstly
, those who prefer flats and storeyed
apartments
 are mostly those families who work in the service sector and they spend a major portion of their time in offices. These buildings tend to have all the facilities available in a common area.
For example
: gardens, parks, swimming pools, kindergartens, gyms etc.
Therefore
, many folks are now shifting to high-rise
apartments
 as they have security guards as well.
However
, these amenities are hardly utilised by the residents. Folks living here rarely know each other and they are not even aware of their neighbourhood.
Moreover
,
such
 buildings are more structured and developed according to a specified plan.
On the other hand
, independent
houses
 are built as per the taste of an individual,
therefore
, they tend to be happier and more satisfied. There is no bar on owning the land and usually,
such
 types of
houses
 are permanent
therefore
, people get to know their neighbours in a short span of time. In the conclusion, I would say that owning an independent house is definitely a better choice if you want to lead a better life in the long term.
Therefore
, people should prefer
such
houses
instead
 of
apartments
 in order to be happy and satisfied in the long run.
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