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In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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Nowadays, in most ,countries junk
food
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 becomes more accessible for
people
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 because the
food
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 is low priced.
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 has positive effects on the economy of a country but there are
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 negative consequences for the environment and giving
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people
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 health issues. On the one hand,
people
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 like to spend their money in
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restaurants
restuarants
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restaurants
.
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: by making
food
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 cheaper and available for
people
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 to buy. The demand for
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restaurants
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restaurant
 becomes high and
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, there are building more and more fast
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restaurants
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restaurants
. Those
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restaurants
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restaurants
 need staff to work for them. That provided more jobs and
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 good for the economy. On the other ,hand all the cheap
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 comes with a price. The most important is the effect on the environment.
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 the cost of producing beef burgers. The consequences are the need for more cows to make those burgers. The cows need space,
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 and they produce a lot of nitrogen. That put extra pressure on the greenhouse effect.
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 fast
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 is not healthy
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. They are made very quickly and contain a lot of fat and sugar. For ,example a burger with fries is more than 1000 calories. The fries come out of a deep fryer and contain a lot of salt. The bun with the burger has
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 of sauces on it that are very high in calories. By eating junk
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people
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 can get high blood pressure and problems with overweight. In ,conclusion cheap
food
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 comes with a price. Especially, the environment having trouble with adjusting. Being overweight and having health problems cost the economy to take care of the sick.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • widespread availability
  • accessibility
  • nutritional value
  • health implications
  • obesity
  • heart disease
  • traditional cooking
  • local cuisines
  • plastic waste
  • environmental impact
  • employment opportunities
  • economic boost
  • time-saving
  • convenience
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