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In many countries good schools and medical facilities only available in cities. Some people believe that new teachers and doctors should work in rural area for few years, but some think everyone should be free to choose where they work, discuss both and give opinion.

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It is thought that most experts in the sphere of studying and medication are located in cities while in rural
areas
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 they are few. Some say that new
teachers
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 and doctors have to
work
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 in rural
areas
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 for a few years and
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 they can relocate their
work
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 to the
city
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, while others say that, they should choose on their own where they will
work
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss both opinions. On the one hand,
graduates
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 who have just graduated from the university don't have enough experience in working, they have only theoretical knowledge, not practical, so, for
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 reason, they should
work
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 in rural
areas
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 to get experience and after that, they can move to the
city
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.
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, as the
graduates
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 who have just finished their courses in university, they have fresh knowledge which they should apply in practice in good conditions, should be available all-new technologies for their
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 thrive in their chosen area. At the same time, if all
graduates
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 will
work
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 in the
city
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, it means that competition among
graduates
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 will grow, and at the same time, in villages, there would be fewer employees. For these reasons,
students
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 should
work
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 in the village for a few years, and after they can use their knowledge in an appropriate way, they can move to the
city
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 for career growth.
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, if
students
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 will have a chance of choosing, most of them will choose to
work
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 in the
city
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, for that several reasons, as the salary is higher than in rural
areas
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, the condition of living and job applications are
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 available for career growth. But, if all
students
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 choose to
work
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 in the
city
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, it will make a huge impact on villages, because if they did not have well-educated
teachers
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 and the number of
teachers
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 is low, it would mean that more families would move to the
city
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. The more people in the
city
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, the more it is hard to live in good conditions,
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 but not the least, if most
students
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 arrived in the
city
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, competition among them would grow on job applications. From my point of view, new
teachers
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 and doctors should
work
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 in the place where they come from, in
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 case, problems with competition in cities would be solved and
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 would make the living condition better in rural
areas
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 as well.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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