Some people believe hunting animals as a sport should not be illegalized while others disagree.

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wild creatures should be provided the protection

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others believe not all

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views and provide my opinion. Most

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wild

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themselves.Because of their killing instincts,they kill humans

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and are dangerous to society.

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incident in which one

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was killed by

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,they do not need any shelter and can live very well on their own.We should not be protecting them but we need

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them from these canines.

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are on the verge of extinction

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as tigers in India.We need to protect them

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views on protecting

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.In my opinion,we should protect all the wild

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and to save them from extinction.

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Your opinion

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

193 words

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe hunting animals as a sport should not be illegalized while others disagree.

Your opinion

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