Some people believe hunting animals as a sport should not be illegalized while others disagree.

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Earth

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planet is the house for all

animals

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.Few people argue that all

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wild creatures should be provided the protection

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others believe not all

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animals

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deserve it.In

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essay,I am going to discuss both

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views and provide my opinion. Most

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the

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wild

animals

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are predators and they can protect

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themselves.Because of their killing instincts,they kill humans

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also

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and are dangerous to society.

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incident in which one

hikes

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was killed by

bear

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hiking

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trip.As wild

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like bear

fox

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have the

strenght

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strength

to fight against any

situatio

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situation

,they do not need any shelter and can live very well on their own.We should not be protecting them but we need

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them from these canines.

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are

wild

animals

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who

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are on the verge of extinction

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as tigers in India.We need to protect them

otherwise

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our descendants will not be able to see them in person.We should ban the hunting of

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animals

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. In conclusion,

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views on protecting

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animal

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animals

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.In my opinion,we should protect all the wild

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to maintain the

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and to save them from extinction.

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task response

Ensure that all points are directly related to the topic and clearly express the writer's opinion.

coherence cohesion

Improve the organization of ideas and provide a clear introduction and conclusion for the essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

193 words

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Some people believe hunting animals as a sport should not be illegalized while others disagree.

Your opinion

Nowadays, a growing number ofpeople with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Recent advances in medical science have resulted in increased life expectancy over the past few years. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's world, people spend a lot of money on appearance because they want to look younger. Why does this happen? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some think that people should not change th9eir jobs while others think they should because it brings advantages for themselves, the company and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.