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Scintefic progress has a great influence on society.Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

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Since the
first
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 inventions were made, humans have been affected a lot during the
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science
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 journey.
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however
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this
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 huge impact has some dark sides but it has
chenged
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changed
 our lives in a good way in many fields and aspects. For
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instance
instence
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 no one can deny the improvements in
healthcare
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 system and making our lives easier than before.
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convienced
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convinced
 that changes
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are made by
science
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 have helped us a lot in
positive
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 way and in
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i
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 will put some
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evidence
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 to prove it.
Firstly
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 the
sciense
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science
 has made every process more
efficent
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efficient
 than before. And it has been proved that if we use
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science
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 in every aspect of our lives, it will accelerate the process and make it faster and easier. One clear example is the
trasportation
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transportation
 system. It can be seen clearly that
nowdays
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 the speed of
transfering
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transferring
 to our destinations is
more
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faster than before.
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consequently
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 we spend less time just
for
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 transportation so we get less
frastrated
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frustrated
 than before and that can leads to us,
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 much longer in comparison to past generations.
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Moreover
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 the new inventions in health diagnosis processes have the same result and help us to cure our diseases and live for a longer period.
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secondly
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 before the start of
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actual
science
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,
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society had been full of
rumers
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rumours
 which were obstacles to the truth.
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 people were suffering from incorrect ways of living which were
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the results
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results
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result
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 of using
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the not
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not
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no
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 scientific methodology in the whole world.
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, the so-called chemists of that era were spending time
to convert
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 copper to gold because of the
rumers
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rumours
, whereas they should have
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on
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 more practical knowledge-based fields.
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 people did not make any development for years. So it is clear that if
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people used pure
science
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 they would feel
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 sense of
fullfilment
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fulfilment
. in
conclusion
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the
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 progress has made our
life
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lives
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 longer, healthier,
more
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and more
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efficiant
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efficient
. And
particulary
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particularly
 we can achieve our goals
easyier
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easier
 as an effect of that. So
i
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 can definitely say that it has a huge positive impact.
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